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To Be a Better Stallion Epilogue by Autumn-Wind-MLP To Be a Better Stallion Epilogue by Autumn-Wind-MLP

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After a crushing second rejection from Rarity, Blueblood finds himself rather emotionally shaken. However, when he finds himself under the guidance of an unassuming farmer, the noblecolt's life will take a turn the likes of which he would never have expected.

Epilogue: Happily Ever After

Eleven months have passed, and the gala comes around. What has become of our leading couple through the passing months, and what awaits their future?
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knucklesxjulie4ever Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
wonderful story write from the beginning, shame that this couple isn't that muched liked, but still a great story.
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Sencilia-Harp Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012
a wonderful end to a wonderful fic ^^
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NE1there Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012
Actually, reading through this again, Apricot seems okay. I'd like to see more introspection and pacing still, but that's okay.
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NE1there Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012
This is one of the shipping fics that feels fuzzy, warm, and maybe, in an alt. universe, even possible. Gave it 5-stars.

The plot (of the fic) was well-written, and I liked many of the details, like Big Mac's tasks, the nearby inn and the pony there, etc. That said, parts could use work, mostly character-building:
-Mainly that Apricot didn't ever get much depth of personality. Motivations and reactions with him and Blueblood were predictable.
-Blueblood changes without enough pivotal "Aha!" moments to be realistic. It's okay for fanfic, but def. could be better.
-Not much introspection. People tend to think that action is always best. Sometimes dialoguing thoughts can make them sound a bit too contrived.
-And a minor point: Rarity's also a little shallow. Wouldn't be an issue in a Blueblood-centered fic, but she has enough written about her that we start to expect a bit more.

Hope that helps, and hope to see more of your writing in the future.
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TGWolven5 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
sighs... What a romantic story!

I read another Prince Blueblood fanfic a while back and frankly, it doesn't compare to yours in any way!

The character development throughout this whole story was so endearing and just drew me in the more I read.

I'm starting my own MLP FIM fanfic, which is likely to turn into a romance story as well, but no matter how hard I try, it will never be anywhere as good as what you have graced us all in this tender, heart-warming miracle of literature.

Bless you for your creativity and insight!
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iamthejam Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2012
Excellent story. Considering all the surprises and plot twists that the series have given us this season, your story is very impressive.
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Radoxeald Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
A Happy Ending! :iconcutenessoverloadplz: :iconsuperw00tplz: :icontwilightclapplz:

I guess I couldn't give any more suitable response than this: [link]

Wonderful, wonderful story. This has settled to be one of my utmost favorite MLP fanfics. Blueblood's characterization worked brilliantly, at first I was skeptical on Blueblood-Rarity ship, but you could say that Bluey really won me over. Not to mention how story rolled smoothly from start to finish and had SO MUCH HEARTWARMING. SweetieSpike was a nice touch, FlutterMac is always generous plus in my eyes and even Diamond Tiara & Silver Spoon are getting their share of character development.

All my salutes, Autumn. All my salutes :iconrainbowdashsaluteplz:
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LightningHoofAUS Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
oh damn, this story has been one sweet ride for all of us. I would like to say thank you for a wonderful a series I have love reading, *wipes tears away* this last story to this wonderful series is the best one ever written. You are a wonderful person and a wonderfully gifted writer. My one wish is write write as wonderfully as do you but I do have my own series I am working on which is going to be very long in it self with the CMC, *claps a hand over mouth* opps I can't give away to much info on what I have install for them in my A Falling Out series yet
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MoochiinLove Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2012
I can't believe you!! I can't believe you would do that! Just....just leave the ending there!! Making me guess whether she said yes or no! (I know she says yes, but come on!) Still, this was a fantastic story, I always got so excited when a new chapter came out! Will there be a sequel, like Blueblood and Rarity dealing with his mother? Oh I can't wait for more!
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Autumn-Wind-MLP Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2012
I don't think dealing with the mother would make for a very interesting fic, considering the mother has been deceased for a while.

I don't have any sequels planned for the moment, mostly because I'm somewhat burned out on this fic for now. Perhaps one day, but I cannot make any promises. I'm glad you enjoyed it, however. It's likely that I'll eventually make other works in a similar mood, however.

Feel free to look up my other writings. Glad you enjoyed this one! ^^
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