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To Be a Better Stallion - Ch.5 by Autumn-Wind-MLP To Be a Better Stallion - Ch.5 by Autumn-Wind-MLP

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After a crushing second rejection from Rarity, Blueblood finds himself rather emotionally shaken. However, when he finds himself under the guidance of an unassuming farmer, the noblecolt's life will take a turn the likes of which he would never have expected.

Chapter 5: The Turning Point

Rarity consults Twilight Sparkle and Fluttershy about how to handle the Blueblood situation. The Prince helps clean the Apples' barn and meets Pinkie in the process. Letters to old friends are written.
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FieryBlade96 Nov 20, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It's coming soon, real soon. I've had some trouble with Chapter 6, but it is now in the proofreading and editing steps. Just a little longer and it'll be ready.
FieryBlade96 Nov 21, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks, and sorry for troubling you. :iconfluttershyplz:
I'm loving the story. The gradual transformation of Blueblood's character is very realistic and believable, as is his past and how he became the pompous ass we saw during the Gala. And the humor is delightfully witty. I especially liked BB's initial reaction to the cut on his leg, as if he was on the verge of bleeding out in moments.

I have to read it in Google docs, though. I can't get it to work in DA. I'm clearly missing a few scripts or updates somewhere in my comp.
Thanks for the comments. ^^

Hm... probably missing a plugin, yeah.
I forgot to add: People like you are the reason I write. Elaborate, well thought out, critique like that, whether positive or not, simply warms my heart.
amazing story. can't wait for more.
MagicaITrevor Oct 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Wow... Okay, that was both short AND long at the same time... HOW?! Perfect length of reading for a single chapter, though one prefers longer, it's hard to argue with a 14 page chapter when others have chapters that are only 5 pages or less, so... Thanks! Please keep up the excellent work! One is almost glad that one isn't a pre-reader for you, as one can barely keep up with one's current duties! XD Anyhoof, please keep it up! Trevor loves reading this fic!
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