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Sparkler has a happy life with her adoptive mother and sister. However, a secret weighs heavy on her. Seeking some advice and relief, she comes knocking at Cheerilee's door.

What does the filly want to confess?

Thanks to Taggerung for the pic!

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x69xSILVERx69x Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013
By any chance do you have this story on
Autumn-Wind-MLP Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013
I do. I have all of my stories there.
fotland42 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012
It bothers me that Cheerilee said "muffin promise" at the end. Muffin promises are special. Not just anypony can make a muffin promise, and it was not Cheerilee's place to be so presumptuous.
Autumn-Wind-MLP Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012
Sparkler was pretty happy about it. I don't believe Cheerilee overstepped her limits there.

Interesting thought though.
TheRebelPhoenix Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
But... her names Derpy.
Autumn-Wind-MLP Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012
I'd like to point out that this fic was published several months ago, before the name Derpy was canonized, and back when Derpy and Ditzy were considered equally valid.

Also, keep in mind that some people still prefer using Ditzy because they find Derpy to be too pejorative to the character.

Thanks for your comment. ^^
Edgeworth1001 Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2012
This is the best fanfiction I ever read!
DarkApostleMatt Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012
Beautiful story.
kevinguzzer Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2012
my reactions from start to finish:
:iconpinkiepieexcitedplz: , :iconapplejackfillysad:, :iconapplejackishappyplz: (reads about Ditzy), :iconpinkiepiesad: (about sparkles's and Shimmer's parents), :iconapplejackishappyplz: (again Ditzy :D) :iconpinkiepiewaitwutplz: :iconapplejacknoesplz: :icontwilightnoesplz: :iconpinkiepienoesplz: (about Shim- i mean Dinky), :iconmanlytearsplz: :icontwilightclapplz: :iconderpyclapplz: its... beautiful... :iconitsbeautifulplz:
Xeno-the-Hedgehog Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is a truly powerful story. Ditzy and her alleged family are among my favorite characters, and it's always nice to see someone portray them so well.
StuntMonkeyProduct Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2012
I generally stay away from reading Ditzy fics. But this one was good, Cheerilee is one of my favorite ponies. I'd rate it but there no star system? So darn?
pj202718 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2011
Oh, my.....not only is Ditzy made of awesome, so are Sparkler and Cheerilee.
CosmicBacon Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2011  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
This is very well written, although I am not a huge fan of the whole idea of Derpy being a mother, but that's just me.
This piece may have just pushed me to thinking that she is a mother just a little farther.
Thank you for such an amazing fic.
partyponypimp Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Let the manly tears rain down from the heavens! Like seriously that was one of the most adorable things I've ever read!
Cakes-DA-Account Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2011
That... was pretty happy! Also, I like how you made the mother the abuser; in most fiction the father is the abuser unless it's comedy, which plays it for humor.
kalashnikovmarine Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Quit... quit making me cry manly tears you beautiful son of a bitch <3
lol1759 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2011  Student Digital Artist
They just wont stop coming! Why!
Radoxeald Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
... Woah. This was good. Easily rivals "My Sweetie" as the best portrayal of Ditzy/Dinky/Sparkler family. Well-balanced between tearjerking and heartwarming.

(Oh, and as a sidenote, when does "To be a Better Stallion" continue? Um, that is, of course if you don't mind me asking :iconfluttershyshyplz:
BigMackintosh Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2011  Hobbyist
im not sure if i want to read now :( i dont want my head canon to be spoiled ;~;
Radoxeald Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I didn't mean it as any kind of degrading comment regarding "My Sweetie" (which IS great story by its own right and I'm eagerly waiting for its sequel to continue ;)). Personally I haven't own MLP headcanon, so the different interpretations in fanfiction don't bother me that much (even if they include ships I'm not too fond of).
BigMackintosh Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2012  Hobbyist
Oh dear, I didnt mean for it to be taken that way, sorry :S I just meant I wont be reading this for fear of making changes to my own that will result in a mismash crossover, something I tried and my have failed already with bubbles...
Radoxeald Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ok. 'S cool. :iconnoworriesplz:
BigMackintosh Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2012  Hobbyist
(deeply inhales) yay! :D
Autumn-Wind-MLP Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2011
I'm working on it, but it should be a little while still.
z55177 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2012
I'm so glad you're still working on it! I was worried it might have been abandoned...
metaknightgirl13 Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2011
I really enjoyed this fanfic. While it did have some dark parts, but you didn't go over the top with the violence.
And you stayed true to the characters:)

This deserves a very good rating:D
CottontailOfChrist Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2011
YES YES YES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This is the best MLP fanfiction I have ever read. In. My. Life. I laughed, I cried, (no, really) and the characters just jumped off the page - so alive and believable. See this journal: [link]
thisisnotanalt Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2011
I'm firsting over here too because all the font sizes in this town are crazy
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